Question 1: Read the following sentence: "The policy was implemented by the administration, and it was intended to reduce costs, and it was expected to take effect immediately." Which revision best improves this sentence?
Topic: Revision Skills
- The policy was implemented by the administration, intended to reduce costs, and expected to take effect immediately.
- The policy, which was implemented by the administration to reduce costs, was expected to take effect immediately.
- Implemented by the administration, the policy was intended to reduce costs and was expected to take effect immediately.
- The administration implemented the policy to reduce costs, effective immediately. (Correct Answer)
Explanation
"The administration implemented the policy to reduce costs, effective immediately" is the strongest revision. It shifts from passive to active voice, eliminates the repetitive "and it was" pattern, and compresses three clauses into one clean sentence. Active voice puts the actor (the administration) up front where it belongs. The original sentence suffers from two problems: passive voice and a chain of weak "and it was" connectors. The best fix tackles both at once. Active voice is almost always more direct, and consolidating related ideas into fewer clauses improves readability. "The policy was implemented by the administration, intended to reduce costs, and expected to take effect immediately" stays in passive voice and just trims the connectors. "The policy, which was implemented by the administration to reduce costs, was expected to take effect immediately" buries the sentence in a relative clause and remains passive throughout. "Implemented by the administration, the policy was intended to reduce costs and was expected to take effect immediately" opens with a participial phrase but keeps the passive voice for the main clause, so the sentence still feels sluggish.

