Question 1: Read the following sentence: "The policy was implemented by the administration, and it was intended to reduce costs, and it was expected to take effect immediately." Which revision best improves this sentence?
Topic: Revision Skills
- The policy was implemented by the administration, intended to reduce costs, and expected to take effect immediately.
- The policy, which was implemented by the administration to reduce costs, was expected to take effect immediately.
- Implemented by the administration, the policy was intended to reduce costs and was expected to take effect immediately.
- The administration implemented the policy to reduce costs, effective immediately. (Correct Answer)
Explanation
"The administration implemented the policy to reduce costs, effective immediately" is strongest because it shifts to active voice and collapses three repetitive clauses into one clean sentence. The actor lands up front where readers expect it. The original has two flaws: passive voice and a chain of weak "and it was" connectors. The best revision fixes both at once. Active voice is more direct because it names who does what, and merging related ideas into fewer clauses improves flow without dropping information. The "intended to reduce costs, and expected to take effect immediately" option stays passive and only trims connectors. The "which was implemented by the administration" option buries the point in a relative clause and stays passive. The "Implemented by the administration, the policy" option opens with a participle but keeps the main clause passive, so it still drags. Default to active voice: subject, strong verb, object. CLEP revision questions usually reward the option that turns passive constructions active while cutting repetition.
